Before Revision

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Every morning after I spend time with God, I write a poem or two.  I am not going to revise them for the moment.  It will be interesting to see what they evolve into when I rewrite them later.  I will assign each of them a number.  I don’t plan on writing any titles at this time.

I just need a break from the writing “game.”  I know you other writers understand.  When you are writing with an editor in mind, it is much different than when you are just writing for the mere pleasure of it.  So, excuse me as I indulge in doing what I love just for the mere love of it.

Poem One:

What will I do without

music to fill the absence of my love

who faded like darkness when the

lights came up on the worn dance floor?

He  dropped hard like rock-

with a final kiss as harmless as helium-

his tasteless departure

left me falling-

caught on whatever

would catch me.

Shawn R. Jones

7 Responses

  1. Interesting concept! Assuming you write in worship, how do you stay focused on God knowing you will intend to publish that poem later on? Do you find the “sharing” of the poem focuses your time, or merely piles on expectations? I’d be interested to hear your thoughts. I share very little of my ‘time with God’ with others.

  2. There was a time when my time with God was only a private interaction. I was not comfortable including others; however, I have learned the benefits of sharing that time. I wrote a devotional, Pictures in Glass Frames. You may have read about it on my blog. In it, I share my spiritual journey, including my struggles. I shared areas of my life I never thought I would share. In the process, I encouraged many other people. Initially, I wrote for my personal healing. It was therapy for me. Now, I realize I wrote it for a greater purpose.

    I still get a lot of alone time with God : ) The majority of the time I spend with God is alone. I just share more now.

    I don’t believe the sharing of the poem piles on expectations. No one is thinking of me that much lol It is more of a reminder to me to get back to it. If I don’t improve it, few will ever think of it again. If I do improve it AND share that improvement, well, it better be good! lol Or at least significantly improved 🙂

    Thank you so much for stopping by and taking the time to comment. Even more so, thank you for your sincere interests.

    I am looking forward to reading more of your work!

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